The stone moss covered giant ''roars save me''.
Shaking in his boots Jack tip toes over to the moss stone giant ''yes I will help you'' he scampers down to the slimy green pond. Jack connects the pump
muddy green water flows and splashes soaking
the moss stone giant. He moves his lumpy feet jumps out over the hole leaving humongous cracks in the ground.
Mōrena J'Varn, tremendous writing! I enjoyed the way you made the giant need help from a small (?) boy. My favourite word is 'scampers' because it gives me a really clear picture of how Jack is moving. It's great to use dialogue in your writing because it lets the reader know what the character is thinking or doing. Check out the link below to see how you should punctuate dialogue so it's clear to the reader who is speaking, and when:
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Ka pai J'Varn, I'm looking forward to reading more!
Kia Ora, I'm Damien from Owairaka District school I like the way when jack tip toes over the moss stone giant. Did you think about making it longer?
ReplyDeleteWhy did you not add more because your storey was getting interesting.
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Kia Ora my name is Hamiora and I,m from Room 23 at Owairaka District School.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your blog post about the giant. I like the way that the giant was very helpful to the boy because it is like us here at Owairaka District School. If we see someone who needs help, we should go and help them.
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